This was really good. Loved how you twisted it to be about you. The flow and rhyming was great aswell. It all went really well. Great job =] 5/5

luv natalie x-x

Wow, what can I say? That was soo good, I'm very impressed! I guess all I can say is keep writing, because you really do have talent! It's really good. I loved it!!!
Loves,
Kelsi Jane XxXxXx!!!

Hey, hunny.. I have to write another comment, coz you're portraying feelings and emotions I felt when I was not much older than you are now.. You've put into words everything that I felt. Well done.. I hope you take hope from all your great work, and find the rainbow after the rain. xx

This is such a good poem! like so amazing!

I'm sorry but that poem was awesome. I mean there's nothing i really can say about it. I don't have too much critism. I mean you could have had more adjectives but that's about it. still it's 5/5.

I really like the poem..... It may have no rhyme or measure... but it has its unique part in the reader's feeling... it can touch the feeling of the reader...

Um ok well i really liked the poem it gave a very good message about "ana" i used to pro ana and i rote poems like this but never so well...i really felt it showed all the things i did and went throgut and it is so tru how u would die for ana ....keep up the good work and please stay safe

XoX *~CrImSon__TeArS~*

The regular rhyme scheme and verse form gives it continuity and a suggestion of endlessness while contrasting well with the subject matter of death and end. The change in rhythm in the last stanza adds poignancy, emphasising the revelation in the last lines. The use of emotive language brings the poem to life with deep feeling, the line ‘stripped her to take her apart’ reflecting the invasion of privacy towards the end. The use of simplicity, such as short stanza and regular rhyme, does not reflect the intensity of feeling and complexity in the poem, and as a result this contrast increases emotions. The word ‘thinspiration’ reveals subtly the core of problems whilst giving an accurate idea of the struggle and pain endured to change ones appearance. Making sure all corresponding lines had equal syllables or stresses would have added yet more power. Yet as it is the differing stresses in the lines makes it seem more colloquial and easy to read, becoming more personal to the reader. Deep and meaningful.
I hope this is what you meant by a real comment.
Keep writing.
xx

It is a bitter sweet relationship we share with ana, hating and loving her at the same time. Dying daily to make her proud of us, hoping that maybe today we will be okay, today we might be thin enough. A powerful poem.

-Tainted Mikochan

Wonderful! It was a really great poem because it held alot of emotions and besides that I've seen how some girls actually do this and just to read it in a poem was heartbreaking! But non the less it was really, really awesome! And the flow of the words were well written w/o a doubt! Couldnt do better myself!
5/5 ^_^ -cheers-

I loved the way u talked about how they had no idea of her depression...bravo and keep writing....i rlly liked the plot too! the way u talked about her in another person form was amazing and creative....grrt poem,
love ya lots,
sore

This is a really brilliant poem. It has a really good pace and it is a really emotive piece. You have a excellent vocabulary and use it superbly. plz take a look at my poems.
Thanks
Imi

Aww a depressing poem.. but very very well written.. I liked the way you wrote it.. nice job.

That was a great poem.!
I loved it! Keep up the great work.

I love this poem!!! omg! great rite!! 5/5 its beautiful and gets the meaning of ana across and what ppl who live the life of ana go throught (cuz its a life stile not a desease!) lol love you!

Hey commenting on yet another one of your poems... i really like this one a lot out of your poems. I like how the story toally portrayed exactely what my life was last year....kinda freaky eh?
i really liked how when you read it through it stops at the bottom to emphasize what happens....very nice as usual

im always here if you need to talk
bri
xoxo