This is very shorty. But it has so much emotion within in it. I really liked it! The way you worded it was just perfect. I also liked the rhyming technique you used. Great job! 5/5

luv natalie

This poem wasn't really said but it did present this intense feeling of longing. I would say add more details but it's fine without them as you're concentrating on more emtion (or so it seems)

It's a good poem as Kaylee and Natalie said, emotional with a bit of imagery. I would loved to have read a bit more depth to the poem, because I felt like to grazed the surface of missing a lover but could have been even deeper to really make an impact. I often think good poetry has the ability to change the readers emotions, to really write them out of the page and upon the other person, but that's just me. So that the respect I started to feel what you had to say, but it didn't touch me really deeply, you know? I am not saying this is bad, because it's not at all. 4/5.

-Tainted Mikochan

A short but quite powerful write. I liked your use of language, especially in the first stanza. I could picture the lonely scene, lonely emotions and lonely environment.
Only suggestion is I think on the third line of the first stanza you meant "sits."
Good job, keep writing.

Hmmmm! full of emotions.... gr8 job done lol!

luv

Loved it - written well, short, but very powerful. Nice write.

Peace. [Sole]

You are a good poet :)

I luved this one sarah =)
ur poems r really good and I do like ur work
hope u r okay
keep it up
Luv
NemO XxXxxxxxX

AWW HOW CUTE LOVE UR POEM

Amazing gosh your so talented
i envy you for being able to write a short poem with so much intensity in your words this is one of my favorite poems

"As my body craves your own"
Made it seem like a drug, I really see where your going...like being with a memory talking to a memory
I may again be making this all wrong
But seriously I love your poetry, this is one of the best I've read today (and I've had to read quite a few)
:)

Loved your poem, It was honeslty great, i have no suggestions to you other than this was a great poem, but its not a sugestion, just a comment but it truely was really good. thanks for the comments on my poem, i trule appreciate it,

This was a very well written!... i liked the flow of it... i can't say that i would change anything about it!...wow that was a nice poem.. i enjoyed reading it.. 5/5!
~*Linz*~