Hey hun i really liked this one something new great job :)
xoxo robyn

I believe he should go to heaven cause the first person to be accepted in to the pearly gates was a murderer. and if this guy sold guns cocaine and meth, even if he killed someone he deserves to be forgiven. if you ask for forgivness you will go to heaven.
i really like your poems maybe you can help me with mine

Great poem but i honestly dont know where he should go..cuz he belongs in heaven for doing it out of love for family but he has also killed many people so i really dont no..keep up the good writing = )

love you
heather

WOW!!! i LOVED it.... if you dont mind you can red some of mine and leave honest comments. I love critisism so its cool if you hate, just tell me so. but dont expect something as good as this

Alright, this is pretty good! I loved the story it tells, with the conversations.
Very interesting and unique.

Well you asked those who comment to answer the question wether we think he should go to heaven or hell.

Well that's a tough question.

Personally I think he should just go to hell for the crimes he has committed. Because everyone is scared when their time has come. Even serial murders would fall upon their knees and cry and beg god for his mercy.

Though I do not believe in hell nor heaven. Not to speak of god angels and devils.

But .. immagining it would all be true I would say hell.

But writing poetry is all about what you think. You have created this character in your poem, and it's all up to you what happens to him.

Nice piece of work, really loved it

Lotsaaaaaaaa love
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Wow that poem totally blew me away, you're right it's completely different from anything you've written that I've read, but i still liked it.
I Don't know what I'd say, I really can't judge him. I can see from both sides, I think he should go to heaven because when you're in love you'd do ANYTHING just for that person. But then again he killed people, I mean what if he killed one of your LOVED ones? Wouldn't you want justice for that? I think once you kill someone there is no going back, sure you can change, but KILLING someone, that's the ultimate mistake. So That's my opinion, and you should end it based on what you think. I hope you make a good choice:) I'm sure I'll love it either way.

An excellent poem, Cody. Very different, emotive and atmospheric. You manage to hold the poem together very well, and its structure is constant.

In my opinion, you should end the poem with a few more stanzas, having the Demon take the situation to God, for him to conclude where this dying mans soul may be taken. You could almost make it a cliff-hanger, that way you are building more tension and are adding effective terms to your writing.

Overall, I am pleased with this poem and am quite surprised at the chosen topic. I too have written a poem similar to this called 'A Descendent' and would be delighted if you could read it. I may just inspire you on how to end this piece =D.
Well done and keep writing.

Much love and God bless,
Fallen.

Nice poem. it is not my place to decide where he should go (that plus i dunno what to decide yet) so i will just leave it up to everyone else. well done!