by Lying To Live Apr 18, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
You watch me as I cry myself to sleep |
by Kaylee
One of the ending stanza's seemed a bt rushed. the poem was good and the general message I think I got, but it didn't project the feeling to the reader that you were expressing. It's good but maybe see where you can cut a few words down here and there. |
I really liked this one actually! the idea behind it was neat and everything seemed to flow more. good job! |
by Joy
I lvoe it |