Enchanting.
So beautifully written.
I loved it, wholeheartedly.
Made me smile, reached the eyes.
The last line stood out above all.

Exquisite.

Kalika

Wow, That was really good. The flow and rhyme scheme was perfect, && I loved this linel "Incurring tears from empty eyes" That was my favourite bit. Keep it up =] 5/5

`natalie x-x

Hey, thanks for comemnting on "truth divine" it was very helpful. means a lot.
I can see you have an extremely accute sense of flow as not a syllable is out of place and everything just fits. it's pretty good in presenting what you're trying to say, however i really had trouble with teh way it was ste out.

Every poet to his own, but having it all right after another made it increasingly difficult to read. I suppose i'm just too used to structure, adn it could easily ahev been written like that for a very good reason, but yeah, all in all it's quite good.

keep smiling
-Suzie

Wow, that really is good, it flows so nicely and is so well written and worded, it feels so much more thought out and professional than alot of the poems I've read and posted here. Very beautiful.

Keep writing =)

I like how everything didn't seem forced even though I'm not much a fan of ryhming poems. I don't know naything about structure so I'll comment on the message. The poem to me was one of the better love poem as it expressed emotion clearly and you could feel it a bit by reading the words. The title was what drew me in and the words unspoken line kept me wanting to read anything else you've written. Maybe because I just love those words.

Great poem. I liked it alot, and enjoyed reading it.

This was very interesting to read because every line kept me guessing and all the while the unspoken words lured me on. I felt your pain and sometimes we really want someone to hear the silent hurting, the urgency and hurting really worked in the poem for me. Pretty good.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

This was very interesting to read because every line kept me guessing and all the while the unspoken words lured me on. I felt your pain and sometimes we really want someone to hear the silent hurting, the urgency and hurting really worked in the poem for me. Pretty good.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

You're such a good writer! I like how your lines have more meaning then some poets. Good job.

!st just some boring stuff..."endurs" should be endures...and this poem would be a bit easier to read maybe if you spaced it out a bit..,.
Well now I can get on to the important part
I actually loved this poem :) You used rhymes that weren't too simplistic or normal and the use of questions emphasised the point of the last line...words being unspoken
Brilliant stuff

This is really good..I loved it..It's filled with so much emotion & the flow was perfect, it really kept my attention. My favorite lines were:
Incurring tears from empty eyes
Suffering within each moment
Without hope of compromise
Those really stood out to me. I loved it. 5/5**

Great write! I love this, it flows well and the language used is just brilliant. It's full of emotion and incredibly sad, keep writing 5/5

Really great work. it reads very nicely, great word usage, only thing i can really say is that it looses some of its power in the last few lines, but still i really love it. beautiful work here! i gave it a 5

Awesome poem . . . Truly. The language used was indescribable, and the effect the poem had on me was amazing. Incredibly well written - Thanks.

Peace. [Sole]

This was really good. Powerfull words you've used. Flow was good, Rhyming was good too. Overall, I just think it was awesome!! It's really sad though.. =[ Anywho.. 5/5

`natalie xx

Stunning writing, the rhyme is brilliant and flows so naturally. Such a beautiful sentiment. I really love the use of repition as well. Favoutite lines "To help me keep this soul intact?
You promised me, you promised that
Forever couldn't hold us in and
Even though the world weren't flat
You'd walk with me off it's end" Superb 5/5

Great write. Nicely structured... flowed and rhymed perfectly. Full of emotions that one can relate. 5/5

I REALLY LOVED THIS POEM, IT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL AND SAD, I FELT EVERY EMOTION YOU PUT INTO IT AND YOUR WORDS WERE GREAT, I LOVE WHEN WRITERS USE WORDS THAT AREN'T COMMONLY SEEN IN POEMS. THIS WAS GREAT, I'M WILL DEFENITLY COME BACK AND READ SOME MORE.

Very nicely written!!!
I reall;y like this poem. The message is strong and clear. I am a big fan of rhyming poems but I couldn't have done it better myself thats for sure...
You ruse of words was precise and very efffective.
The only thing I noticed (and it may have been done for effect) but for these lines:
Forever couldn't hold us in and
Even though the world weren't flat

You use 'and' at the end of one line....it fits well in rhyme but it differes from the rest of your poem where you end each line without a word that does not carry you into the next line. I think whe you have the word 'and' at the end it kinda starts you into the next line....again tho this is just me thinking out loud.
Great Job! I really liked this poem.

Ahh.. BEAUTIFUL poem. I was certainly all caught up in the midst of your words. That was a truly amazing piece. Perfect flow and rhythm. You really have a way with words. I can't wait to continue reading. Awesome job!

--emotionless.19*