Truth Divine

This is great

~shanny~

Wow. I loved your choice of words in this piece. It was really thought provoking and deep. I loved it.

The flow was really well done for the most part except for one certain spot.
[Like eyelashes theyâ??re glued with tears
And hatred of a friend
Bruised the raindrops from the sky
As they start to descend]
^^The second and the fourth line don't really flow very well. If you added another word or syllable into te fourth line, it would flow better.

The rhymes were...wow. I mean some could've been replaced with different ones, but overall they weren't too bad. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha
PS: No, a 4/5 isn't downvoting =P Like a 3 or lower would be lol. No worries.

WOW! I LOVED this. The words were so beautiful and well thought out, you are a truely amazing writer, great work.

--steph

Wow that was amazing! i wasn't quite sure the topic though or like what you were getting at, it wasn't completley clear, but the poem was amazing!! really great write!! 5/5

Ohhhmigosh. te second third and fifth stanzas rock like whoaaa. seriously beautiful. 5/5
Whooo hooo big words. =P