Deathly Bubble

by Polly   Apr 18, 2006


Trapped within a deathly bubble,
All necessities of life denied,
The land called love still clearly visible,
But through the walls to which I'm tied.

Countless struggles I've made in vain,
To weaken the devil's attack,
But every time I murder it's evil,
The pain is inflicted to me, straight back.

No-one understands what I try and explain -
As I attempt to break through and get help.
My cries are mistaken, ignored, or worse yet:
'It's all for attention, brought on by her self'.

The despair, distress, anger and grief,
The emptiness and loneliness inside,
The pitiful feeling as I think to myself,
Is this forever? This anger, pain and fright?

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  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Eh, I really didn't enjoy this poem.. I thought it would be more about the devil, but it said nothing about him. Maybe by hidden meaning, but not in the poem. Plus you broke the rhyme and had bad formatting.

    xDarkSuicidex 4.5

  • 18 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Wow, you wrote this very well! It reminds me of something i'd write. Every line in the poem was flawless, and it flowed so perfect and naturally, great work on this, ill be sure to read more of your stuff!

    --Steph

  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Very dark. you use great terminology and use of words that maximises the mental image. very powerful. very dark. loved it completely : D 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    This is really sad and somewhat angry.
    I love the imagery of the first 2 stanzas but I feel it loses it's momentum a little after that. I can certainly identify with the third stanza and th last gives it a good ending.

  • 18 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    Ihate to think say this but I truley did not expect excellent poetry from a 12 year old( I truley am sorry that I even thought that now) I think this poem was awesome, there was a lot of emotion and thought in it. It truely was a great write,
    -AnnMarie

    Be sure to check out two of my poem as promised in the forum........

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