I really like the mesage in this poem and i totally agree with it! i also like the structure but i do think it could do with a bit of work, maybe some kind of consistent rhythm or rhyme?? good work though xx

Excellent poem, I loved the message in this poem...It really hit me, and I totally agree with everything you were trying to say here. With editing, I am sure it will reach perfect, even better than it seems already. Keep it up! 5/5

Black rains still better

Really good. Very honest, I like that. There were some places were it sounded a little awkward though like the first stanza. Anyway it's still really great.

Wow this was full of emotion, and I'm sure some people will be grateful for you sticking up for them
Incredible, I gope you make people think
Well done

That is really good & i dont think that you should edit it, I love the way that it turned out. It's definitely something that many people can relate to. You did a great job on this! I Loved it!