Comments : Life time of sin

  • 16 years ago

    by Come What May

    Ok, so I really like this poem alot, but I'm an English minor so I'm kind of a critical reader...so as I was reading I edited a little...just some friendly tips if you'd like to use them.
    1. in stanza 2 line 1 you wrote shouldn't of, and it really should be changed to shouldn't have.
    2. in stanza 2 line 6, you wrote whose arm's it should be whose arms (no apostrophe)
    and finally
    3. stanza 4 lines 2 and 4, myself is only one word.
    Anyway, like i said, i loved it but i hope those help! Keep writing!