I understand the spur-of-the-moment writing poetry/music thing! :) I LOVE that you shared some with your audience! :D
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Omagosh. aidyn, you have topped the topping cream on the cake,my friend.and yes, i wondered at the whole comment about the music being set to it; i think that would pull it all together and make the slight sing-songy type rhythm of the poem seem extra sparkly, if you see what i mean. the only thing is the whole 'listen out their stay' line. i'm not sure, but maybe you could replace 'out' with 'through' or something like that? i'm not sure i understand it. other n' that, a great big WOW to you.