The Angels Are Crying

Okay, Im looking at the comment I just left and well the way I wanted you to see it..it didnt come out like the form(3,3,4,3,3). All I mean is 3 lines in the first stanza and so on...

hope that helps..

P.S you spelled Angels in the title Angles : )

*Julie*

I really liked the poem but the flow was a bit off. Your work as alot of great points to and I think you are hiding them without really a layout to it. I put your poem in a different form(3,3,4,3,3). I know some people take offense to me helping them, I hope you arent one of them. Im just helping the flow! Other then the flow I loved the meaning of this poem, its one of those that goes deeper than words. Great work, keep writing.

The angels are crying for me today, they see me falling
now...

My bright eyes slowly dimming as I die
inside the angels know I only smile
so no one sees the scars I hide.

Putting on this face every day
it becomes stone hard, setting up a wall of defense as my one and only guard.

Just listen to my screams that I'm trying to let out...
Just listen to my heart,

That does not make a sound.
Open up your eyes,maybe you will see all of the sorrow thats consuming me