Comments : The day i met you, the day i fell in love with you,

  • 18 years ago

    by Tripp

    I member the day i first met you,
    your smile just made me fall in love with u.

    good lines right there. just, when you write, try to have it follow a pattern. if you notice my later poems, they all follow a layout...but yeah, other than that, this poem has emotion and love in every line, and i can certainly identify with it. keep improving