This was good. Short but good. I liked it. There is a error in it though. But it's just a site error. It's a sad poem though. Has alot of emotion in it. But I really liked it 5/5

`natalie x-x

Another one im sure iv read before, great rhyming scheme and some well expressed thoughts xx

I like it alot

Deep. Very nicely written - the flow was excellent, and the rhyming was great.

Peace. [Sole]

Wow! That was short, but deep and full of emotion. I loved it, and I love all of your poems, basically, with every one I have read so far I found no imperfections. Keep writing! 5/5

I love this poem.. its reli sad tho, but thats where its beauty lies.. ur rhymed it well, and ur flow wasnt so bad.. better yet, ur words wer powerfully numb.. hehe.. i mean they were so drained of hope... and very discouraging... but i reli enjoyed reading it coz im starting to thik that way...
gr8 job with this poem
keep going
take care
NannO

p.s. thnx 4 ur comment

Great job. It's refreshing to see that suicide was implied, unlike every other poem were it's bluntly discribled. Awesome.

This poem seems to show how people can thinkk they are worthless, which makes me want to make a difference in the World
A good insight, I believe, into depression
Well done

I really don't know what to say. It is a great poem, I know that much. I love how you write what you feel and you don't make all of it up. That is a great thing.

This poem has great flow and a great structure. Keep the awesome work up :)

Awesome. I love it

**FIREWORKS** WHAT A GREAT POEM!! The ending was completely spectacular! I loved it!

Very well written, I could actually picture this in my head quite vividly ^_^ great work hun...

-*-Cherri-*-

ps: thank you for the friendly critisim, i take it alright.

I feel this way myself at times.. it's depressing. A good job you did writing it.. short but meaningful.

And, for the record.. a pop-tart is like 2 bits of chocolate biscuit with some chocolate syrup type thing in the inside. Very nice but not stocking them where I live anymore :(

Omfg you have no idia how much i love this poem if i could rate higher than 5 i would!!

Really great, definatly favorite of yours.. just one thing though... should
"Though both highs and low"
be
"THROUGH both highs and lows"

?????

either way, great work, keep it up!!!

I like it!! lol, hi. take care and keep writing.. bye bye

Fantastic poem, a great read. It'sdeep and moving, it really describes apathy, the feeling that you're fading away. Structured well and flows throughout. Perfect poem, keep writing 5/5

Grrr, I like this so much I turned off my music.

It was an excellent, sad poem.
Short and steady.
I really enjoyed it..You showed a great amount of emotion in such a few words.x

I can seriously relate to this poem its awesome i luv it great job!! 5/5!!

I know what it feels like to think no one will care, no one will bother. You wrote it down nicely. 5/5

Mallori