This poenm isnt totaly finished but that is most of it i will fix it later when i get my paper that i wrote it on!

It's a good start, kind of cute. I like how you use rhetorical questions to get your point across. The only thing I didn't understand was the first line:

"Have u ever wanted to dry a treat you know you made fall?"

I'm not sure exactly what you mean by that, I'd be interested to know though.

Good job, I'll have to check out the entire poem when you have it finished.