It's a well written poem with a very cool story in it. It created such great visual picture as I read it. The flow could be a bit better but overall i liked it =) good job.

This is the first poem of yours I have read, and I am adding you to my favourites. Exquisite work.
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Also, I congratulate you for not binding yourself completely to a rhyme-scheme of sorts. I despise people who rely solely on rhyme-schemes. Speaking from opinion though, because I believe (as rhyme schemes were created by OTHER PEOPLE) it is not very original for the author.
Again, good work.

"Careless those who become entranced"
this sentence requires more punctuation to make grammatical sense, particularly between 'careless' and the rest of the sentence.
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"Fearful of the morning rays of l light, long ago danced"
of what light? what is 'l' light?
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"Digging to the ancient soil hence which they are sown"
I thought that was an awkward sentence construction that hindered the rhythm of the stanza for the sake of the rhyme. I'd consider revising.
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Interesting story poem, very dark and ghoul-y.

Great formation and use of rhymes, great dark story wonderfuly writen 5 strars lynne