Fantastic peice. brilliant expression, very powerful and clearly written with some strong feelings. the structure and form are well composed with a smooth flow and unforced rhymes. i couldn't find any faults what so every. brilliant peice

5/5

The flow off every now and then nearly drags it down but it was the words and content that pulled it off. The third stanza seemed to be the better one because the lines were cool.
~Fallen