by ~~Lindsay Woods~~ Apr 21, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
I called you on your birthday, but you never answered the phone. |
Aw girl, I told him you called n he said he'd try to get back to you ... that was stupid of him and I smacked him on the head the otherday for it. I think he gets the point cuz I only talk to him when I'm mad at him n e more. |
Lots of emotion, and you convey it well. nice work |
by Emma
Beautiful...i loved it...nice work... |
by Kaylee
It felt akward and everything seemed to jump around. Everything was good concept wise but you need a direction to start in and a diretion to end the poem with. 4/5 |
by Emily
Wowser, it's a very good poem, great ending line, it really tied it all up. The second stanza had the best flow. Keep up the good work. |