Thinking....

by Amanda   Apr 21, 2006


Thinking of the past,
each night I go to bed,
Lots of mixed up feelings,
and thoughts inside my head,

Thinking of my friends,
the new ones and the old,
How they've stuck beside me,
whenever my world grew cold,

Thinking of my birth family,
and asking questions why,
They hurt me like they did,
and why they have to lie,

Thinking of this family,
and why they hurt me bad,
Why they're always judging me,
and making me feel sad,

Thinking of my new job,
and how much it means to me,
To feel like I'm doing good,
and I'm as happy as can be,

Thinking there are good points,
but there's alot more of the bad,
Asking myself why I'm unhappy,
why I'm often feeling sad,

But as I turn out the lights,
Head on the pillow where I lay,
I secretly just start praying,
that tomorrow's a better day.

Copyright 2006 - Amanda Linzi

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  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen Angel

    I really loved this one. The rhyme and structure work really well to keep the rhythm nice and constant and calm giving it a really meloncholy edge. The last stanza is my favourite "But as I turn out the lights,
    Head on the pillow where I lay,
    I secretly just start praying,
    that tomorrow's a better day" still sad but gilded with a kind of sorrowful hope. Great write. 5/5 x

  • 18 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    Such a sad and revealing poem. The word thinking had the cumulative effect of how the thought were flowing and this lead well into each stanza. The ending was really good. "Prayer" is a powerful thing...I hope all is well. Nice poem..

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Maybe try to limit each time you say thinking. Try every other paragraph maybe unless you think his way is better. The final stanza held the most power as it tied it together was different (didn't have thinking) and was unique to the poem. It did have a lot of emotion, didn't feel forced, and always remeber tomorow's a better day.

  • 18 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    One of my fave poems, so very well expressed and I loved how it ended. I am so sorry that you have to feel like this hunni and I must honestly say that I think about you alot, how you are and what you are doing ect. I hope that you are okay?? You know I am here for you, always, you just email me any time you need some one to talk with sweety....My shoulders are for you to cry on =0)

    Love you sweet Angel

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    Really good rhyme sceme :) I'm sure plenty of people can relate to this
    Maybe think of some imagery to place in a poem like this next time
    Great stuff

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