Comments : Broken.

  • 18 years ago

    by sarah

    Kristyyyyy,
    this is one of the best poems you have ever writen!
    omggg i love it heaps dude.
    nice work.
    love always savannah xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Great flow.. i really liked it.. good work!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    In the last stanza "breathe" should be breath...

    The line "falls to the floor" was the only critism I could think of because it broke the flow a bit
    The rest...well I'm not sure why you made a topic saying "my poems suck" because quite frankly they don't
    The short lines made each one its only little point and was very effective
    It was like...lots of different little thoughts all coming out, like depression
    Stop saying your poems suck because they don't!!!
    A GREAT read

  • 17 years ago

    by xXxBrOkEnAnGeLxXx

    I love this poem..
    and i know exactly how you feel hun and it hurts like hell...
    no one should have to go thru that but everyone dus..
    so keep your head up girl things will get better...
    5/5