The line "falls to the floor" was the only critism I could think of because it broke the flow a bit
The rest...well I'm not sure why you made a topic saying "my poems suck" because quite frankly they don't
The short lines made each one its only little point and was very effective
It was like...lots of different little thoughts all coming out, like depression
Stop saying your poems suck because they don't!!!
A GREAT read
I love this poem..
and i know exactly how you feel hun and it hurts like hell...
no one should have to go thru that but everyone dus..
so keep your head up girl things will get better...
5/5