Heart breaker

by "."mýstíç"."   Apr 22, 2006


She was popular
He was too
A day they've met each other
And it seems like a dream come true

After a few months
He decide to break her heart
She didn't do anything about it
She just let him tear it apart

Her friends tried to comfort her
But she never cared
She just ignored them
Like if they're not there

She was popular
He was too
She fell for his lies
When he said I love you

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  • 17 years ago

    by Delie

    Aww, sad yet sometime sthis happens, and it takes a long time til u can actually get over the guy...great realistic poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    The way the first and last stanzas link really adds power t this peice, the content is good and clear, though i feel it lacks in expression slightly, i feel that you could have added so much more to this peice. but as it is it is still a very good and well written peice.

  • 18 years ago

    by just a poet

    Great rhyming scheme, loved the poem but maybe you could have put some more feeling into it? i loved the first and last stanza the thing u did with them though powerful. i do agree with lost laureate thou, it was short and simple but maybe you could develop it a bit more, you no a bit more detail or if not a bit more emotion and description.

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Lots of emotion - the last stanza was really quite powerful too. Great poem.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    Wow. This is consise and yet still has some beautiful emotions behind it. I seemed a bit stark at times and there were a few grammatical mistakes...nice start but I think you should develop this one further I want to know more about this guy and this girl!!

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

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