His Name

by Green M&M   Apr 23, 2006


I don't know your name,
I don't know if your the same,
You could be searching for me and I'd never know,
i think if i had a chance to go meet you I would go,
Why is it she doesn't tell me,
Why is it she wont tell me,
She says your Indian and maybe half white,
Is she not telling me cause you guys had a fight?,

She told my sister about her dad,
Why can't I know about the one I had?,
Were you mean?,
Or do you not want to be seen?,
Did you do time in jail,
Or is it that you just wanted to bail?,
Whatever it is Who ever you are,
Weather you live close or far,
All I want to know is HIS NAME......?

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  • 17 years ago

    by Anonymous

    That was pretty good.
    Just a little too forced.

  • 17 years ago

    by Dark Kitten

    Not the best of your poems. I saw some repetition in there and again the need for more commas, but it was a decent read still. Keep it up.

  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This was a great poem! i didnt really understand it at first but i do now.. its really good.

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Nice poem, keep the great job up/ 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Maybe you could try forcing the rhyme a bit less in some places and focus on your fluency more. I am not insulting you. You see to have the rhyme pattern down, but it feels like you need to have your poem rhyme takes away from the diction and flow that could really help you create and shape this poem. It has a good message, I don't know, I guess I think you have the ability to really give it a life of its own, and I was sad that I didn't feel that as much with this poem.

    -Tainted

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