Wowwwwww darien i totally totally loved this keep it up hun you are so awesome....im a fan!!!
it was long and i couldnt take my eyes OFF it....it captured me all along...and what a sad story...beautiful
Dhaval

Wow darien, this was really amazing, I loved it! it was long but it kept me completely gripped from beginning to end, it told a really sad story which I felt I could relate to, I love the way it finishes off, very interesting... well done...

0mg darien. i really liked the way u wr0te this with such p0wer and em0ti0n. w0w it was s0 like.. heartfelt. very sad and deep. great j0b 0n this 0ne. h0pe ur d0iin g0od. =]

l0ve fr0m
d0ra

Man... This is very deep, sad and moving. The flow kept me gripped and I read it smoothly to the end without any interruption. This is a little different from what you write, and I must say it's good different. Superb writing my friend. Oh and good luck with those exams :)

Tat was a good poem i really liked it keeep writing trust me on this i knw it might sound lame but i went through the same stuff you went through i knw how you feel

Wow. i give you major kudos... and it reminds me of someone i know. keep writing.

This is an amazing poem. I loved it, so deep and true. 5/5

O my goodness!This is such an AMAZING poem!GREAT job!Wow I am very proud to give you a comment!It is just so good!WOW!

Oh wow, intense. I got the shivers, keep up the gd work! and keep ur head up high, there are others...if this is really about a gurl that you fell for and hurt you like this that is...
-Jenna xo

Your poem is amazing!! im sorry that she put you through so much pain. i can relate so much to this poem coz i was like sally i had a boyfriend then we broke up and i met sum1 else but i realised that i loved my ex and now we are together. maybe she really does love you, she just made a mistake. you should follow your heart i knw its scary but u can only learn from wat u encounter.
my best wishes for you in the future
Jade:)

Wow thats intense. i love it. i usualy hate long poems but that kept me until the very end. amazing. the end is esp haunting. its so sad but the diary idea worked awesomely. i love.

Wow, Darien! I love everything about this poem.. So powerful and heartbreaking.. I really love how you did this one in a whole, amazingly written! Awesome stuff!

Wow, that was so beautiful yet dark. I can can fathom the things running through your mind at that time. I too keep a diary and have entires of things such as those which you write about in your poem. It's so sad but I've been there emotionally before. I hope things are working out ofr you and your girlfriend. Get back to me on your condition hopefully it's a joyousone...

Naima

Wow, Darien! I totally love this!! The title got me and I was hooked from there. Excellent, excellent job on this. Completely amazing!

Wow, that was amazing! AMAZING! This one should really have been one of the top poems! WOW! You definatly have a spot on my faverotes list! wow..... this was just amazing!

This is the best poem i read in a while now! i really mean it, it's rhyming scheme is the best and it flows beautifly ! 5/5

~StefQ

Aw.. This is really sad. But really good. I did a poem like this too.. But.. It was bad lol.. Even though it was pretty long, it was really good. You knew what to write to keep the readers attention! So 5/5 =] && Thanks heaps for the comment, I don't have any music for my songs, But i'm working on it cause I know a few people where I live that are in bands aswell. So yesh! So thanks again =]

`taleeee xx

Good poem:-)

I don't have a Diary, but I can relate to some of what you speak. Good job man. I like the way you speak your story. 5.5

The diary format worked a treat on this. It was so raw and real thats what I love about your poetry. I come across many male poets stuff on this site but you wrote so beautifully. The last two lines were so powerful and so very sad.

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