Ahh yes. i read this on Matt's Competetion. very very good. You shoudl be very happy and proud of this poem, improv isn't as easy as it seems. a good poem made from a good title : )
-Suzie
xox

Very depressing poem - You've used some great techniques, and the rhyming really fits just into place, except the slight stumble in the first verse. Overall, nicely written, deep and complex if you look beyond the outer lines, but it flows well and makes a gripping read.

Peace. [Sole]

You deserve a much higher rating Rubz
This was a most beautiful piece.
Another favourite poem from the lovely Ruby
Love
~Em

I did it i commented on every single one, phhhwww took a while but i did it :)
thanks for everything.
This is part in thanks and adoration of your writing.
Stay inspired and keep writing.
always
~Em