I thought the tone of the poem betrayed the darkness/sadness of the topic. I liked this cause it sounds almost bittersweet. In the first couple of stanzas what are are writing about it also not revealed and can be interpreted in different ways. It is a complete surprise when the true meaning and metaphors are shown in the third stanza. I thought the words in the last stanza contradicted themselves (with 'showing' and 'hidden away') so maybe a couple more lines or descriptions added will make it sound more complete. Congrats for winning the poetry contest :)