None of Them Know, Why I Feel so Low

by Tripp   Apr 25, 2006


Ehhh, not my best, nor my favorite. I just started writing, and it just kept almost writing itself. comment and tell me what you think

None of them know
why I feel so low

None of them know
why I dont say no

To this knife
even if its my life

That I put on the line
naw, I\'m not just fine

I\'m tired of this
of the lack of bliss

My life is falling apart
starting at my heart

Emotions fall to pieces and crumble
just like my ego, I\'m now humble

Instead of commanding honor
I am brought down, and feel a goner

I\'m only an emptry shell
now living in this hell

Called a world
I\'m what Satan\'s hurled

up, nothings the same anymore
I am depressed, to my very core

And my life is changing
but my soul is ranging

Beyond this place, and time
I know that this isn\'t a crime

Just to love, and show how I feel
even if it means I must kneel

and offer fealty, to this life
and deal with all this strife

But you see it\'s all worth it in the end
If I have just one true friend

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  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I think this is a good one. :) I lvoe the 2 line rhyme thats hard than a 3 lined stanza i think...keep it up buddy. I am grounded but my problem is solved I wasnt able ot goto my babys prom btu now i am:) so i will talk to you in liek 3 weeks. ....I am at skool now so yeah. I might post if i find time. Latas buddy.

    Lissa

  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I think this is a good one. :) I lvoe the 2 line rhyme thats hard than a 3 lined stanza i think...keep it up buddy. I am grounded but my problem is solved I wasnt able ot goto my babys prom btu now i am:) so i will talk to you in liek 3 weeks. ....I am at skool now so yeah. I might post if i find time. Latas buddy.

    Lissa

  • 18 years ago

    by Lemadi

    Ok, this was not a very inspirin poem, you are very talented but try and be more emotional when writin these poems, let them relate to yourself and just lose yourself when writing them but this was pretty pleasing

  • 18 years ago

    by Tripp

    Dude I hate this...how I copy/paste it from notepad, and then when I go to post it, it puts in the slashes...it bugs the hell out of me.

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