Oh wow eric -_- thats... some tough shiznat. great poem but wow... I'm so sorry *hugs* just remember heartache and death are to things your cant escape but one you can avoid and you better avoid it *shakes fist at you lol* yes thoughts are always tempting when things happen, but think of happy moments you'll miss out on, and the prefect girl that will have to setle for less cause you not around. *sorry im commenting more on your prfile then on the poem goooo me!*

poem wise: nice ryhmes ...personally i cant do ryhmes.. EVER!

A fantastic poem. You have a good ryhming structure and you have brought your emotions across tremendously. Get it published. A truly incredible poem.
Jade x

Great poem!! i could feel your pain through each line... and i really hope this hasn't happened to you. BUT, if it has, just remember that she couldn't see what an amazing person you are... she doesn't deserve you. some day, you'll find someone who loves you and would NEVER do that to you. never give up hope. stay strong and take care,
-xXx-
P.S. thanks for the comment on my poem, it means a lot!!

Im sorry to hear that eric, i can not say that i have been through that but my heart goes out to u.... i hope u can mend with time. it might hurt for alot of things do, and the tears that are sheed are normal, so let the pain drown out.. this is a very good write. 5/5

I like this poem. Its because there are so many people who have been through tough times. And you make it your reality through words. Its awesome.