Great poem - very sweet, but so sad, with its sense of a losing love. There were a few easy correctible mistakes,

naivee...
should be
naive...

Your guard droped and
droped should be dropped

speak openingly to me
openingly would make more sense as openly

Othere than that - awesome message, very well written.

Peace. [Sole]

Really sweet poem, some parts didnt really seem to flow, but it was still really good all in all. nice work

Great job! I loved the emotion behind this poem. It like tells a sad story. It's really good. My favorite lines are: Your guard dropped and walls crumbled down,
With the feeling of security around me.
Those really stood out to me. I loved it. 5/5**

Superbly written poem that shows an obvious talent. This poem clearly has such an incredible emotion behind it and this comes across very strongly, a true tale of unrequited love. I particularly liked
"And I know I don't have as deep of a place in your heart.
I may never be the spark that you were searching for,
But can't you see how treasured you will be?
If you know that one day some girl will be the luckiest girl to have found me,"
Wonderfully expressive. Great write 5/5

Hey there, Im just leaving this to let you know, I know that I owe you four comments right now, but as of now, I have already commented on all of your poems lol. But Ill be checking back, so I promise I will give you your due comments once youve written some new poems!!! till then, take care and keep up the great work!

*~peace and love~*

*~Amanda Hope~*

ps, ill put you on my fav list so I know when you have them done ;)

Great job, you can still improve your flow

Loved it! There was a lot of emotion in it. It was so heartfelt and sad. Very good! 5/5

Aww.. very sweet.. your emotion was really strong! it was a veryy good poem! i like it! keep it up! 5/5
jessy

Very sweet love poem!! The flow was a bi rocy as rach said!! But it was a very well writen love poem!! Your a fantastic writer!!5/5

Not the best flow in the world but it was very swete and the emotions you put forth just amde it all the better :)

Im not so sure how great the flow was but i loved the idea and thought it was very sweet

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

What a romantic poem, full of emotion there were many sweet lines. Well written.

[lost_laureate]

Aw, That so cute. Loved the 2nd stanza. It was so good. Another awesome write. You're a great writer. 5/5

`taleee xx

I loved this poem, it maybe likely because i can relate to these feelings
Good job 5/5
-Clαяissα ♥

Really like it an easy relatable topic

5/5 nice flow keep it up

This is a very sad love story. It is a very well written piece. I have only read 2 of your poems so far and I can already tell that you are a very good writer. :) Keep it up.

>black&&blue

Wow. So much emotion. You really must be passionate about this topic. =) That's a compliment by the way lol. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Again I found it hard to follow... You aren't using any type of flow to your poems which just kills the message...

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Hey, wow you just decribed the feelings of so many people, so well. Amazing poem, Love
~She Died Screaming

Ah, more brilliance. Well done, indeed! *claps* 5 from me.