Comments : True Feelings...

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Great poem - very sweet, but so sad, with its sense of a losing love. There were a few easy correctible mistakes,

    naivee...
    should be
    naive...

    Your guard droped and
    droped should be dropped

    speak openingly to me
    openingly would make more sense as openly

    Othere than that - awesome message, very well written.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Really sweet poem, some parts didnt really seem to flow, but it was still really good all in all. nice work

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Great job! I loved the emotion behind this poem. It like tells a sad story. It's really good. My favorite lines are: Your guard dropped and walls crumbled down,
    With the feeling of security around me.
    Those really stood out to me. I loved it. 5/5**

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen Angel

    Superbly written poem that shows an obvious talent. This poem clearly has such an incredible emotion behind it and this comes across very strongly, a true tale of unrequited love. I particularly liked
    "And I know I don't have as deep of a place in your heart.
    I may never be the spark that you were searching for,
    But can't you see how treasured you will be?
    If you know that one day some girl will be the luckiest girl to have found me,"
    Wonderfully expressive. Great write 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Hey there, Im just leaving this to let you know, I know that I owe you four comments right now, but as of now, I have already commented on all of your poems lol. But Ill be checking back, so I promise I will give you your due comments once youve written some new poems!!! till then, take care and keep up the great work!

    *~peace and love~*

    *~Amanda Hope~*

    ps, ill put you on my fav list so I know when you have them done ;)

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Great job, you can still improve your flow

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Loved it! There was a lot of emotion in it. It was so heartfelt and sad. Very good! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Aww.. very sweet.. your emotion was really strong! it was a veryy good poem! i like it! keep it up! 5/5
    jessy

  • Very sweet love poem!! The flow was a bi rocy as rach said!! But it was a very well writen love poem!! Your a fantastic writer!!5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Synh

    Not the best flow in the world but it was very swete and the emotions you put forth just amde it all the better :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Im not so sure how great the flow was but i loved the idea and thought it was very sweet

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 18 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    What a romantic poem, full of emotion there were many sweet lines. Well written.

    [lost_laureate]

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw, That so cute. Loved the 2nd stanza. It was so good. Another awesome write. You're a great writer. 5/5

    `taleee xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Clarissa

    I loved this poem, it maybe likely because i can relate to these feelings
    Good job 5/5
    -Clαяissα ♥

  • 18 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    Really like it an easy relatable topic

    5/5 nice flow keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    This is a very sad love story. It is a very well written piece. I have only read 2 of your poems so far and I can already tell that you are a very good writer. :) Keep it up.

    >black&&blue

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Wow. So much emotion. You really must be passionate about this topic. =) That's a compliment by the way lol. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Again I found it hard to follow... You aren't using any type of flow to your poems which just kills the message...

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • Hey, wow you just decribed the feelings of so many people, so well. Amazing poem, Love
    ~She Died Screaming

  • 18 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Ah, more brilliance. Well done, indeed! *claps* 5 from me.