Ok if you're gonna vote down, atleast tell me whyyyy. dont be an ***hole, and just vote low for no reason

If I were to die, you'd be my very last thought
and I'd never regret, all the memories we've got
of both of us together, just the two of us, our arms entwined
whenever I wake up, you're the first thought on my mind

I really like this line sequence. I love it how there are commas in the middle of the line making you pause, and then go on to read. Overall this poem was great and some of the lines just made me want to say, "Aw", aloud. Keep Writing!

Very heartfelt. You have expressed yourself beautifully in this poem.
It was such a good read I loved it!!

I also have one like this called Dedicated To My Dearest....check it out if ya got time I wuld luv to hear your thoughts!

Were to die you'd be my very last thought..all it was touchign but this hit me the most...keep it up.

Lissa

Were to die you'd be my very last thought..all it was touchign but this hit me the most...keep it up.

Lissa

Thats awesome that ur w/ her for a yr now! congrats! i hope to find someone special like you have....nice flow and i liked quite a few of the stanzas....grrt job w/ the ending! thx lots....
love ya lots,
sore

"Both of us, seem like a perfect match
like two shoes, made in the same batch
we're perfect together, and even if we don't talk
I feel your love, and wish that I could walk"

I found this idea so sweet. Not much of it jumped out for me but this certainly did. Another emotional and romantic poem...

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