This peice is great. the progression and structure are brilliantly done anfd the content well expressed.

5/5

This poem has a real sense of progression and I loved the twist at the end. I really well expressed piece and I loved every line. I also really liked the way that you used to rhyme for effect rather thanm constantly all the way through, it was a really brave choice and you carried it well. Great stuff, 5/5 x