Great peice, very descriptive and well written with a good concept. the structure and flow are solid and the content very well written.

only got one comment really which is that in the 3rd stanza maybe you could alter "unique sounds" to "unique of sounds" as this seems to fit much better

Wow.. you are just an amazing poet.. i cant say anything else except that i think when you get older you should definetely be a poet! woah..
jessy xox