Very intense and quite eerie, I liked this alot

Sondos

Your poem needs structuring, or it will just be a piece of prose. Nevertheless, it's well done. You go against the rule "show, don't tell", but it really doesn't matter that much because you do a good job of telling.

Your ideas are kind of scattered, but somehow you've managed to weave them all together so they'd flow nicely. Because there is no structure, the poem seems loosely intense, if that's even possible.

A good ending; it hits home and leaves behind this cold sting. Overall your poem is loose and sad, a little like in autumn when the leaves are falling down. At least, it gave me that feeling.

It was perfect!! but sad too.....I am sorry about your cousin

I understand where you are coming from. maybe it will hope the eyes of others too

Old habits resurface when you feel alone,--sadly so true
the ending hits you with emotion, really well written,
im truely sorry if this poem is real