Wow this is a really good poem..It was very descriptive. I love the way you ended it...kinda creepy lol. But the flow in this was PERFECT!! It really helped keep your interest.. great poem! 5/5*

Yes its dark..
but its fkn awesome
then again im all fore violence and gore.... lol
nah well done gal!
keep writting
xoxoxo

I liked the first one i read better, they are fairly similar. there are a few little things id change to help it flow better, but i like it overall, good job!

Oooh. wow. Now this is what you call a Dark poem! Tehe. I loved it actually. It's really different to most dark poems you read around here, and that's why I like it! Very nicely done! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

I loved it even though it scared the shit out of me you are really a good writer and you should be noticed ur so unique in your poetry xxx alex xxx

Again an amazing poem! im adding you to my favorites. Great Job!!! ( i like writing dark poems myself ) *wink* 5/5 awesome job!
i like the last stanza the best again.

I thought this poem was just a wee bit corny. Like to me this poem sounds like your trying to be dark and mysterious when really that's not what you were wanting to be passionent about. I think instead of worrying what will come out.

Next time just write what comes to your mind and edit it later if needed. you know what I mean.

I'm not trying to say your a bad writer so don't think that...
4/5
kaila