Datz sadd... hope you guyz are alrite now.. :) your poem rhymes but not very easily sometimes.. jus my opinion :P keep writing!
jessy

It flowed okay, but some parts seemed forced. I'm really sorry if the happened. It had a lot of emotion in it. You have some talent. Good job!

The ryhme seemed a little rocky and forced at times!! But still a good write!!! 4/5!! Never quit writing!!

Woot! bumped it up .1