This is really strong. And great too. I really liked it! It's sad that the drunk driver actually lived, He should have been punished! Drink drivings bad! Anywho, I thought it was brillant! 5/5

`natalie xx

Wow-- Awesome poem! Driving drunk is HORABLE! my dad used to do it luckly he never killed anyone just got hurt himself really bad!

Heya, nice poem as seyella said it works really well. In my opinion it doesn't matter about the terror and near not rhyming, poetic licence huh? Great work and take care
Polly x

The concept was really good but this part was thrown off:
Of when the drunk driver hit my car,
And when I knew that death was near.
^Good idea but it's more telling instead of showing. If you can go into details. Sight, scent, touch, sound etc.

if you can please check out some of my lyrics. You don't have to but if you wanted to.

Great POEM... i loved it... keep it up..

Wow...=)...wonderful poem! keep up the good work, i enjoy reading it.

Wow so powerful and moving it was something people never get to hear about, all the feelings that come before death and how the family feels very sad but powerful i enjoyed it.

keep the talent keep the faith keep the ability to write beautifully

laura

Nice job, its really good, you pulled that together really well, and its a very powerful topic. Keep up the good work

Jade

I honestly havn't read a poem about death from this kind of perspective b4.

it was really refreshing. i totally loved it.

unique, beautiful, tragic.

Aww!! This was so sad. I hope none of it is based on true events. I hate drunk drivers so much. So I really liked this poem. Very good meaning in it. 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I didn't like the way you took the poem.. It would have been so much darker had the girl left by suicide but was still watching over the world, you know what I mean?If I may, may I do that? Or would you consider that taking your idea? If you do, just say... But anyways, a great write it was anyways. Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Wow this is so sad. This just reminds me of all the accidents caused my drunk drivers......

Aww. It has so much emotion. Such a dark poem...

The flow was very good, and the rhymes were better in some places than others. The topic was well chosen, and a lot of people feel this way about drunk driving. I hope this didn't happen to anyone you know. =( 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Ohhh..That was really strong, powerful and great imagery. I enjoyed it. It sent shivers up my body as I read it though, nicely done.

Nice one 4/5 i got ur msg in this poem and i like it

Thats another nice poem! sooo sad! sometimes things happen this way! keep it up!

Wow...i have tears in my eyes reading this, and yes i agree drink driving is stupid and dangerous. 5/5

What a great imagination you must have to write something like this. it just feels so... true !! great job. love your poems x

Whoa! that was some deep stuff there hun! Great poem! I love the perspective on this!
Ciao xx

This is a really awesome poem, I can really relate to what I have to go through everyday. Thxs for replying on my discussion.

Tony :D love ya
plz if you have time, comment on some of my poems, I would be greatful