Welp it might be a lil sucky but o wel..tell me wat u think ne ways..good or bad...n wat u think might make it a lil batter..if u comment i'll comment back:) alwayz..

Wow. Loved it. Keep it up and you'll be a great poet one day.

I liked it. made me smile. generally good.

I thought it was man nice and i can relate to wat u mean it was good 5/5 keep it up ^.^