Much better, i enjoied reading this peice, i could feel your emotion so well, you expressed it vivdly. Great and Masterful work hun... ^_^

Another brilliant poem
5/5
very well written so perfect & full of depth
love
amy

Brilliant poem!!! Well writte!! Your emotion was expressed very well!!! Loved it 5/5!!

An emotional write, it's very hard to let someone go and you wrote about this well. I liked the first two lines, the description of the burning feeling inside was good, and very true.
Just some corrections: you have "tare" it's spelt "tear."
On the second to last line it should be "and."
Well done, touching write.

Oh great Nana Lil your now safe and sound,
although your feet don't touch the ground,
i still see and hear you all around.
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I loved that stanza. It was really good. And the poem overall was brillant aswell. It was really touching, And I could understand the emotions. Keep up the great work! 5/5

`taleee xx