Very well written, but i may add some friendly critism... you have a very unusual style and techniqe in your poem, but in a good way, your rhyming sceme is fare. you put so much emotion, i can tell, but didn't feel it as much. ^_^

AWESOME WRITE... VERY TOUCHING & DEEP & FILLED WITH EMOTION
5/5
LOVE
AMY

AWESOME WRITE... VERY TOUCHING & DEEP & FILLED WITH EMOTION
5/5
LOVE
AMY

I really liked your style of writing on this peice Gemowa! .... i`m sure it made other readers remember there loved ones that have passed over, with great affection! (as it did for me)

All the best
Dave.x

Awe your wording was perfect! So sad and sweet! I can half relate to this poem and i think that might be why I like it so much! You show great talent in your poetry! 5/5

Aweh this is so sad it made me cry

but you looked so peaceful lying the, still looking at you i just couldn't bare.

theres a mistake in that stanza with the the part it doesnt end or w/e

but um i liked this

its really good 5/5 good flow.

Awsome write!! Filled with lots of emotion!! Loved it!! 5/5

Awsome write!! Filled with lots of emotion!! Loved it!! 5/5

Aww.. are you alrite? you poor sweetheart.. very good poem, it almost made me cry..keep up the wonderful work and keep your chin up!
lotsa love!
jessy xox

Aw, This was sad. I'm really sorry for your loss if this is true.

Brillant poem though, It flowed beautifuly and had so much meaning to it. Awesome job! 5/5

`taleee xx