Woah this is like really different from your other stuff...the repetition at the end of the line is an effective method (something I have done before)
And going his, his, his, no was also a very good structure point
And of course the rhyming was great except the 3rd stanza (gone??)

This poem is very sad. When I read it, I cried. I was sexually abused as a child and that is the whole reason I started the contest. It was really tough when I had to pick the places too. It was a tie between you and someone else. It was a really tough decision. I really like this one though. You did a great job on it. You really did.

This was my favorite stanza:
His sinful smile, clouding her vision
His hateful stare, his mindless derision
His laughter as he makes a lifelong incision
No longer can she cry

Great job..* 5/5

Nicely written.. I liked the technique you used to write this.. and I have a feeling on what it's about..

Nice poem you wrote :)

Hey Sole, this kind of reminds me of when I was sexually abused by my ex. I read through your comments and saw one from this person who said it related to them in this way, I suppose, and I saw how it did relate to me even more than of just his image. So I feel really sad after reading this. It's different than you're usual stuff. Dark and sad and the repetition was perfect. Actually, I feel like that sometimes when I remember things. Like it's hard to cry so that line struck home.

His evil gestures no longer seem so wrong. That line kind of threw me off. It didn't seem to match the statement of the poem. Other than that, it was good. Keep writing.

This poem just blew me away. I love the repetition of the last line in every stanza.. It gives it an even sadder touch. It was very descriptive & it flowed well.. great job! 5/5**

Breathtaking, what else can I say?! Really held me from the off, you really know how to grab a reader's attention and thats a real art. As always you start strong and finish strong, your use of repetition gives the poem much more power, a truely gruesome poem. Makes me want to shudder! 5/5 x

Really deep and powerfull! nice work

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Can relate.
Good job writing this hun.
You have been on my favorites ever since I first signed on this site.
Awesome job on this.
The rhyming was excellent.
And so was the flow.

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