Thats a really cute poem ;) x x

Cute. I can not believe someone would say this was a cute poem. Nothing cute about it. The subject matter is dark and sad. You should really concentrate more on describing the emotions maybe instead of just plain action. Just a suggestion. There are too many cutting poems, even from people who do cut, that say the same things over and over again that it's really hard to find one that stands out. The words didn't feel forced which is a good sign. Your second stanza felt the strongest as you can sense the fear.

I'm not sure I'd change much, I really liked this as it is, dark and powerful. The short length really gives it some impact. Good stuff.

Wow this is really good! It has alot of emotion behind it & it flowed well.. i can really relate to it.. great job!! 5/5**

Wow this poem was great. you did a wonderfull job. i give a 5/5

Great 3 stanzas, a lot of your poems are ONLY 3 stanzas long though. Thats a huge let down when people are reading your poems and its only this long. I use to write this way too, but then I combined short ones, edited a little better, and I came up with poems that a ton of people love. So just try to extend them, start out by just adding one more stanza, then another. A few short poems are ok, but just try to make some more lengthy.

Not Perfect, but still good.
4/5
Bryce

All i can say is i understand and can relate to everything u write...email me ANY time u need to talk rndmfrk@hotmail.com

This is short and to the point its again awesome!!!! i luv it good job 5/5

Short..but flowed very nice.....lots of emotion....keep it up!

This was a short poem but a very good poem, it was filled with emotion, and I can relate, so i understand 100% how hard it is........I give u a 5/5
*thanx 4 commenting on mine!!!
love always jennifer

Another short poem but well explained and written. Keep up the great work and your talent is amazing. Thanks for reading my work. Take care Amanda :)

Wow... such a short poem, yet it has so much power in it... says it all... keep ur chin up n be strong =)

Love
Jacs
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This flowed beautiful shrot but effective . i liked the title thats what made me want to read it . a great poem xxALLYxx

The flow and rhymes were great, it had a really nice rythym to it. Sad, but really good.

I dunno what you're on about this "my old poems were rubbish" stuff cuz they're not! Sure your new stuff is better but I still really like these oldies! I like the rhyming in this one. Nice and simple, telling it as it is. Super-de-duper effective.

5/5

Em xXx