by Unrequited Apr 28, 2006
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
I wrote this a long time ago, but somehow forgot to post it. So here it is. Enjoy! |
by Kaylee
The concept, and most of the word choice is really good and paints such a vivid picture. But the first part felt a bit awkward because of the way itwas formatted with lines running this way and that instead of staying neat like the rest of it. The longer lines to me makes poems feel messy and kind of takes away from the impact they could have made. But as I said, most of it was really good. |