I hate to see flowers die

by Sorefromreality   Apr 29, 2006


I hate to see flowers die
it's like the worst pain
one that you can't help
but you want to so badly
an aura of loneliness
the petals falling to the ground
an incurable sight of hopelessness
like life will never be found
seeing the stem grow brittle
reminds me of my inner battle
sadness grabs me
it won't let go
the leaves are ripping
like my heart is tearing
a tear fills my eye
when i see nature die
like another life wasted
another poison tasted
the flower is screaming, it wants to live!
i want to live
but I'm of no use
i have nothing to give
a final petal falling
watching something die
is another spirit killed
it's like a dagger in my heart
to throw away the limp flower
now it's gone, cast away
you cant get it back,
try as you may
i watered it, gave it sun
where did i go wrong
i feel like I've been miserable
and suffering for too long
but now i see
what always made me cry
it was you
you frickin flowers!
and having to watch you die!
focusing on your death, a searing pain
that i can't fix
watching every part of you
slowly getting ripped
if i said i cleaned that vase out afterwards
and went back to my life
I'd be telling a lie
because i keep replaying that misfortune
i hate seeing flowers die...

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 18 years ago

    by girl who wrote this stuff

    Omg, this was really good. I've never read anything like this. you do write really good stuff. I loved it! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Some parts of it i liked and some parts could use work. overall it's an alright poem but it's how you did the last few lines that makes me want to move it up to a four along with the fact that the idea and the title are creative. the title caught my eye. thanks so much for your nicely put comments acompenied by a generious rating by the way. i'll give this one a four.

  • 18 years ago

    by bleed4eternity

    You had a good idea and exicuted it well
    the description went along with everything ( mood, symbolism. etc...) nicely
    the only critisism i have it that you might want to have a few stanzas instead of one big poem
    it would be easier to read and will allow you to have more enphosis on the parts that you feel should stand out and be noticed, thus guiding the reader through your thoughts easier

    over all good job!

  • 18 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    Awesome poem! It's a very unique style that I haven't seen. None the less it was a great write! Very Creative!! Keep it up!
    -cheers- ^_^

  • 18 years ago

    by lonelynow

    Wow- that is one of the best poems i have ever read. brilliant and original idea, and really well written as well!

    well done!

    lonelynow x x x

Read All Comments (12)

More Poems By Sorefromreality