Untouchable Love

It came as soon as time
I held it as if it was a crime
Untouchable Love
I gave my heart through those bars
Now all I can do is try and heal the scars
Untouchable Love
I have a great need to start crying
But all I can do is keep on trying
Untouchable Love
You want to be friends
But will the hurt ever end
Untouchable Love
I need to hear that you will not fear
While I will not shade a tear
Untouchable Love
Now it has flown bye
In my heart I will never let it die
Untouchable Love

This is a poem that my brother wrote and i just wanted to get all of your oppions on it. He thinks it isnt that good but i keep tellin him that it is ok and he needs to be quiet but he wont listen to me...so just give your oppion please!