The Hard Way To Learn

Full of remorse within
Unburden yourself of sin
Come and live
There is much to give

Forsaken thee be
Your soul I cannot see
This crime
Of taking mine

You don't see the light
You always try to fight
All these things
All these flings

How could all?
The mighty fall?
Don't say a word
You have nothing I haven't heard

Tears upon my cheek
They try to speak
I don't need to say
Please go away

Don't try
So hard to fly
Just go to sleep
Ever so deep

I cannot hear
All these things I fear
Don't try to tell me
Just leave me be

Don't try to cry
I hate to see you try
Don't feel so scared
Your heart is spared

Don't try to speak
Not a single peep
I don't want to know
These things, NO!

Around your eyes
Inside you cries
I hope one day
We can learn to say
I Love You
In every single way

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