Yu luv 2 use slang words dun u? Well, my advice, don't, some poets here r critical, ahem, I'm not that critical, so dun be angry with me ya, I'm juz giving u advice incase u 1 them, well, it sounds good at the beginning, but starting 2 get a bit mess up in the end, but it's still ur poem, u write wot u think, n yea, there's no need 4 u 2 satisfy others, hope u don't get me wrong, didn't mean 2...oh well, continue writing...I'm sure u can do better...good luck, n hmm again, I'm not mean lol...