To Whom Ever This May Concern

As reading some of your poems..I made a point that you are so good at repetitions and know how to use them well
And this was so sad and sorrowful like everyone can relate to
Well done,
Laura

This is very interesting piece. The repitition had a nice function in it. You have managed to keep the rhymes though its not 100%. Its really nice and well penned. 5/5 you got it dear

With love
Fsams

A provocative and VERY well written piece. As opposed to your other works, this poem, in my opinion, possesses the strongest flow and sound rhythm. I must say, your wording here portrays a lot of emotion :).
However, a couple of adjustments are still required. First of all, the title. Now, I was put off a little by reading it. I seriously feel that the 'ever' is unnecessary and the piece will flow a lot easily without it. Secondly, this stanza:
"To Whom Ever This May Concern,
I just want to be forgotten.
No-one will ever understand
How hard this life of mine has been."

I would alter the latter line to:
"How hard my life has been". Just makes more sense to keep it more abrupt like the rest of the sentences there.
And finally, I would strongly suggest using the appropriate grammar! Lol, as opposed to constantly throwing in a full stop at the end of most of your lines (which tends to confuse a reader), use either a comma, semi colon ';' or leave it blank. Either of these ways and you've got yourself a brilliant poem.

Other than that, very well done. This was the best I read! :).

Very good rhyming
your such a great poet
I absolutly love your work
5/5
kaila

Very good rhyming
your such a great poet
I absolutly love your work
5/5
kaila