Not bad, I'm personally more fond of writing that has a bit more structure, but as far as they go, this is a good piece of work. With a very true message to it i might add.

Why does this only have a 3 rating??? *Gives it 5 immediately*. A really thought out and emotional poem that highlights a genuine problem in todays society in a very personal, mature and thought out way. Excellent stuff. Was hooked from the beginning to the end! x