I thought it was quite good, just take away the /...
Check out mine some time;)
Love,
Line

This is an awesome poem. I know a friend who would really like this poem. As for suggestions, i have none. Awesime job.

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I think its looking good so far, il check again 2 see if u change it!

I believe this is a geat poem. I like the different style of writing you had. It was very unique. 5/5 for me
xoxoxox
Jess