Comments : Infection

  • 18 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    I like the way you compared your lover to an infection it worked really well particularly the last lines. This bit was a bit sticky:

    "
    You cut through me like I'm butter, and you a knife."

    Tipped the flow a bit maybe rephrase/ shorten it....apart from that this rawked....

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