This was good. But the rhyming seemed a little forced, Some of the words jus didnt go. And you spelled hoar wrong, it's 'w-h-o-r-e' [it wouldnt let me say it in the comment so i had to put it like that] just so you know. But work on it a little more, And it should come together pretty good. Keep writing! 5/5

`taleee xx