Hey there.

not bad at all...i think you could be a little bit more inventive with the way you said the things you needed to say....but as an idea...it was fine, if a little cliche [run away with me etc].

Check out my article on saying things in a clever way in the articles section of this website.

I liked the ending the best. it was very nice : ) ur doing well my friend, but you are yet to become as one wiht "the way" LOL. kool tv show.
tty Tim
-Snoo

This poem gave me inspiration and looked in to my inner self, you know why.
I'm going to print this out, thanks so much.
~Em